Comments Overall I am really impressed with your very first film sequence edit. You have really started from scratch with your knowledge and come really far in being able to produce a film sequence that clearly demonstrates your understanding of the thriller genre, even if in some areas there is a lot of room for tweaking, refining and growing in ability and in technique. - I like the thought put into your title style choice. It has a very sinister effect and also the fact that there was silence during that part. - Sound levels need attention as the sound drops out in the beginning randomly and then goes back to normal. - I think for future, recording sound is going to be a very important part of your film sequence footage. Well done in sourcing and matching up sound effects that help to create the effect of the actions on screen but to keep verisimilitude and continuity and to keep your audience believing the world on screen is 'real', it helps to have ambient sound and the sounds that would have been there on the day of filming. It also leaves you with sound level problems when you do use the actual sound recorded with the footage. Having silence and just music for the rest of the film and then having the audio background sound not matching the rest of the film is distracting from the action on screen. - Mise-en-scene also needs a little more attention to detail. Most of this film sequence has a really great tone and feel, it is just little things like the random guy in the background at what should be a really sinister, secret sort of arrival to a 'secret' location that doesn't match up. - Using the contrast of light and dark was effective, the shot of the garage door opening from the inside was great and helped to really highlight the dark of the 'world' inside and the light outside. - you seem to have a good understanding of the relationship between the music and the tension levels however I feel like you can explore this a bit more with PT 2. See how tension levels can rise when you change the music up at scene changes and at different parts of the narrative. Even playing around with volume levels can increase or decrease tension and suspense. - I like the use of the red hue to change the setting for when the victim is introduced - The scene where the victim is introduced could have really amped up the tension perhaps with some playing around with camera angles such as close-ups to convey the terror and fear on the victims face? Although I do like the close-up of the victim struggling at the end of that scene. That is a great example of what could have bee utilised at the beginning to help us as the audience sympathise with this character we have only just met. - I like the use of the heartbeat sound effect at the end and that shows an understanding of the sound conventions of the thriller genre. It really builds suspense although this could have been even more effective with the use of really intense music instead of the same track you used throughout.
Technical Requirements Shot-reverse-shot - this needs a bit more attention to detail. The shot needs to be the point of view of the viewer and then reversed, this could be a straight point of view shot or an over the shoulder shot. The shot you used to demonstrate this was off to the side and showing both subjects. 180' Rule: this was adhered to and continuity was maintained in camera position, well done. Match-on-action - the walking into the garage scene and then cutting to the shot of the main character walking away from us into the light was well edited and maintained continuity.
Hi Gilmark
ReplyDeleteOverall Score: 12/20
Comments
Overall I am really impressed with your very first film sequence edit. You have really started from scratch with your knowledge and come really far in being able to produce a film sequence that clearly demonstrates your understanding of the thriller genre, even if in some areas there is a lot of room for tweaking, refining and growing in ability and in technique.
- I like the thought put into your title style choice. It has a very sinister effect and also the fact that there was silence during that part.
- Sound levels need attention as the sound drops out in the beginning randomly and then goes back to normal.
- I think for future, recording sound is going to be a very important part of your film sequence footage. Well done in sourcing and matching up sound effects that help to create the effect of the actions on screen but to keep verisimilitude and continuity and to keep your audience believing the world on screen is 'real', it helps to have ambient sound and the sounds that would have been there on the day of filming. It also leaves you with sound level problems when you do use the actual sound recorded with the footage. Having silence and just music for the rest of the film and then having the audio background sound not matching the rest of the film is distracting from the action on screen.
- Mise-en-scene also needs a little more attention to detail. Most of this film sequence has a really great tone and feel, it is just little things like the random guy in the background at what should be a really sinister, secret sort of arrival to a 'secret' location that doesn't match up.
- Using the contrast of light and dark was effective, the shot of the garage door opening from the inside was great and helped to really highlight the dark of the 'world' inside and the light outside.
- you seem to have a good understanding of the relationship between the music and the tension levels however I feel like you can explore this a bit more with PT 2. See how tension levels can rise when you change the music up at scene changes and at different parts of the narrative. Even playing around with volume levels can increase or decrease tension and suspense.
- I like the use of the red hue to change the setting for when the victim is introduced
- The scene where the victim is introduced could have really amped up the tension perhaps with some playing around with camera angles such as close-ups to convey the terror and fear on the victims face? Although I do like the close-up of the victim struggling at the end of that scene. That is a great example of what could have bee utilised at the beginning to help us as the audience sympathise with this character we have only just met.
- I like the use of the heartbeat sound effect at the end and that shows an understanding of the sound conventions of the thriller genre. It really builds suspense although this could have been even more effective with the use of really intense music instead of the same track you used throughout.
Technical Requirements
Shot-reverse-shot - this needs a bit more attention to detail. The shot needs to be the point of view of the viewer and then reversed, this could be a straight point of view shot or an over the shoulder shot. The shot you used to demonstrate this was off to the side and showing both subjects.
180' Rule: this was adhered to and continuity was maintained in camera position, well done.
Match-on-action - the walking into the garage scene and then cutting to the shot of the main character walking away from us into the light was well edited and maintained continuity.